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Awesomesauce. I like how it's different than the normal story.
Suggestions:
- Baby Glace's the first "bay" eon? Wha? xD
- Baby Vapy is a boy. xD You fixed that.
- Hrm, this story seems to switch from 1st person to 3rd person. I suggest you stick to one type, otherwise it might be a little confusing.
Erm, that's all I can think ATM. xD
BTW, do I have to sign up Vapy? :P
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